写作训练(2005年1月20日) | |
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合肥晚报The Song of My 2004 2005 is comimg .But I can't forget my 2004.It was areallybeautiful song . I'm a middle school student and I like to One day I got 20 yuan for my article.Maybe it was a smallnumberof money to some people but for me it was big enough .″Howdo Iuse the money ﹖I should use it in the center way ″ I thought.Ofcourse I wouldn't use it to buy toys snacks or something else.Iwould buy some things for study like pens notebooks.I didn'twantto use my parents' money .It would be more meaningful to use myownmoney . When I heard a little girl called HuiHui lost he mother Iknewwhat I should do .Our school held a donating activity.Icontributed the rest of the money to the little girl .I foundthebest way to spend my money . Money is very useful to us and we should know its value .Weshoulduse it properly.That will bring us more happiness andjoy. You seemy 2004 was really valuable .And the song of my 2004wasbeautiful.center﹖ I learned a lot in my 2004.It was precious formyfuture.Dear friendslet us listen to the song of your 2004youwillfind many wonderful music pieces that were wrote byyourself四十五中八(8)班 贾之琳 李正宏点评:本文通过讲述如何使用自己写文章得来的稿费这一典型事例,描绘了2004年的收获和意义,体现出来的深度和立志独立的思想意识,是值得每个同学学习的。值得注意的是,短文采用夹叙夹议的形式是初中生习作中不常见的,这也是本文小作者英语水平的体现,不足之处是,语句比较单调。 (来源:合肥晚报) | |